I can't really think of much in the way of criticisms, as it is rather lovely. I do have a couple of questions though - Perhaps I can't see it because it is too light to be picked up by the scanner, but for some reason my eye is drawn to the white space in the center of the frame. At first it is drawn to the unicorn and then to the female figure... but then the white space draws me in. Were you perhaps planning to put something there, fading out of sight?
Hmmn.., There are only two little things I noticed about the characters. Other then that I think this is a fablous piece. ^.^
The face of the female seems a bit off. The face seems a bit short for the size and proportion of the skull, but it fits the proportion of the body. I would suggest fixing the top of the head to better reflect the face. Why? You have a lovely face there, and those are a heck of alot harder ( IMO ) to tweek with then anything else. If its the hair that makes it seem that way, maybe change the hair do a bit to make the top of the head smaller/shorter?
Faces tend to be of equal length ( the measurement from chin to the hairline ) as the length of the skull's brain box. ^.^ ( From roughly where the hairline is to the back of the skull ).
^.^
The uni's body is a bit off as well, as it seems that it has no back to really speak of. The chest has little definition to it, but this could easily be because of the glow from the key. When its colored in this could be fixed easily enough. ^.^ But the back, hmmn. Maybe if you define more of the fore-shoulder, and made the belly curve out. From this angle th ebelly would actually curve /around/ and in front of the back leg a bit. Not alot, just a bit. I think the lack of belly-age is what may be throwing my view of this off a bit. ^.^ It would layer the figure, and give it a better sense of proportion and depth. :D
*wags*
The whole rest of the piece I .., well lets say I want to see this finished. Its georgoius!
Love the toadstool city. I agree that the white space in the middle is distracting, but a hint of far-off background would take care of that easily.
I think the girl's face is fine, but the back of her skull seems to be distended slightly. I think if you built up the hair on the front/top of her head a touch higher, and took a little of the bulk off the crown/back so it seems like the hair is weighed down closer to the skull, then have an upward curve to spill around her shoulders, that would fix it.
I really like the unicorn. It seems to have a personality, and the anatomy is very traditional - straight out of the tapestries. Agree with other remarks about the barrel curve showing at the junction of the hind leg, but I wouldn't touch anything else.
One more tiny picky thing, because I'm a pest. I would take a close look at the girl's thigh. The line of it seems flat to me - there should be a slight curve mid-thigh - and the knee is rounded as if she had a bent Gumby leg instead of a true joint. Try working in the point of her kneecap under there.
Terrific hair on them both, and I like the detail. The setting is inspired. I fear the cuteness.
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Date: 2003-02-28 11:49 pm (UTC)Perhaps I can't see it because it is too light to be picked up by the scanner, but for some reason my eye is drawn to the white space in the center of the frame. At first it is drawn to the unicorn and then to the female figure... but then the white space draws me in. Were you perhaps planning to put something there, fading out of sight?
^.^
Date: 2003-03-01 06:57 am (UTC)Hmmn.., There are only two little things I noticed about the characters. Other then that I think this is a fablous piece. ^.^
The face of the female seems a bit off. The face seems a bit short for the size and proportion of the skull, but it fits the proportion of the body. I would suggest fixing the top of the head to better reflect the face. Why? You have a lovely face there, and those are a heck of alot harder ( IMO ) to tweek with then anything else. If its the hair that makes it seem that way, maybe change the hair do a bit to make the top of the head smaller/shorter?
Faces tend to be of equal length ( the measurement from chin to the hairline ) as the length of the skull's brain box. ^.^ ( From roughly where the hairline is to the back of the skull ).
^.^
The uni's body is a bit off as well, as it seems that it has no back to really speak of. The chest has little definition to it, but this could easily be because of the glow from the key. When its colored in this could be fixed easily enough. ^.^ But the back, hmmn. Maybe if you define more of the fore-shoulder, and made the belly curve out. From this angle th ebelly would actually curve /around/ and in front of the back leg a bit. Not alot, just a bit. I think the lack of belly-age is what may be throwing my view of this off a bit. ^.^ It would layer the figure, and give it a better sense of proportion and depth. :D
*wags*
The whole rest of the piece I .., well lets say I want to see this finished. Its georgoius!
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Date: 2003-03-01 10:59 am (UTC)I really love the toadstools. :)
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Date: 2003-03-02 07:00 am (UTC)I think the girl's face is fine, but the back of her skull seems to be distended slightly. I think if you built up the hair on the front/top of her head a touch higher, and took a little of the bulk off the crown/back so it seems like the hair is weighed down closer to the skull, then have an upward curve to spill around her shoulders, that would fix it.
I really like the unicorn. It seems to have a personality, and the anatomy is very traditional - straight out of the tapestries. Agree with other remarks about the barrel curve showing at the junction of the hind leg, but I wouldn't touch anything else.
One more tiny picky thing, because I'm a pest. I would take a close look at the girl's thigh. The line of it seems flat to me - there should be a slight curve mid-thigh - and the knee is rounded as if she had a bent Gumby leg instead of a true joint. Try working in the point of her kneecap under there.
Terrific hair on them both, and I like the detail. The setting is inspired. I fear the cuteness.